October Girl

[quote="Mental-Monkey"]This my favorite poem that i've ever writen, so enjoy... [b]They lied to me and I hate you, For making me believe they were true. We are dead, we are ...

[quote="BigBadBear"][b]I Have a Secret[/b] I have a secret: A song to sing. A poem to read. It’s a formidable thing. Do you dare enter my domain? My mind of all ...

[quote="Gadi."][b]The Last Word[/b] There it is—a faux pas in society, lying feeble on this very page, a cube, a puzzle piece, a block— something like a sizzling fluorescent light in ...

Whoa! I loved the title and that's what brought me in, but when I ooked at it I was like nu uh I am not reading this whole entire thing, ...

( not my photo found on photobucket) With out you I’d die>>> TOO OBVIOUS Wither away till time was distant Shatter into a million pieces>>>MANY PEOPLE USE THIS GIMME SOMETHING ...

[quote="Talking_Pinata"]You hang your head—how did you get here? There’s no past, no future, and hardly any now. The darkness surrounds, but there is an up, and a down. There’s all ...

[quote="Sakah"]This looks like a really interesting story, but I think the first chapter needs a lot of back story to explain a few things. Why did Mary run away in ...

Jared!!! **hugs** hey I really like this you were right why does love always have to be between two humans so that was a great idea you were thinking outside ...

wow this is really great, I think the ending was pretty great too, I don't really have anything to comment beside that I really liked it, maybe you could expand ...

I love the first sentence it drew me in, but I think this is a long prologue if you ever are going to publish this piece (which I think you ...

[quote="errtu2"]Interesting, i cant bring my thoughts on the subject matter to bare except to say that you have chosen a timeless topic and did a commendable job on it. Now ...

Hello, I noticed your new and wanted to take the time to say welcome to YWS!!! I'm Max. This was a great first, second, thrid ect... post. I loved the ...

[quote="Writing for love is a pas"] You loved me once, do you remember. From April, June, to September.>>>>> This is ok, but it doesn't really push me. You were so ...

oh goodness so touching, I like it. Perhaps there's a story behind it? Maybe? But I like the title but it isn't really... Drawing the reader in. Think of something ...

Hmm this was a rather interesting poem, some how different, but in a good way 8) I like it... Alot although some parts just don't flow together well, try re-reading ...